The Prompt: Gift

The Prompt 58

They had been a gift, those days. She knew that now. Now that they were over. Now that she couldn’t go back, couldn’t make it right.

She was adrift. No land in sight, nothing solid to stand on. Nothing stable.

You need to see what’s right in front of you. You need to appreciate the little things. You need to find the good in every day.

She’d heard it all. She’d tried to listen. But, you don’t, do you? Or you think; I will, tomorrow. Just let me get through today.

And, then? Well, then it’s too late.

She needed to move on. She needed to learn. She needed to do all of those clich├ęd things that come after.

Her mind wandered. A clear, blue sky; a breeze whispering in her ears; laughter, light and young and free, enveloping her. If she just concentrated hard enough, wished hard enough, she would be able to feel the grass beneath her feet, the warmth of the sun on her skin.

She looked down at the details of the house again; spacious rooms, original features, needs modernisation, potential for development.

Solid, standing strong against the elements.

Her friends thought her mad to even consider the remote property. Her real estate agent had gently suggested other houses; mindful of his commission, but unable to find it in himself to encourage her.

But, she could feel a pull. A connection.

To this house by the sea.

This story comes before Thunder and Dream.

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You can find this weeks #ThePrompt linky here. I do hope this week’s prompt inspired you; I look forward to reading your posts.

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19 thoughts on “The Prompt: Gift”

  1. So full of emotion and feeling and with such a sense of sadness and nostalgia too. Love the sound of the house by the sea and will have to go back and read it in relation to the other two pieces too.

  2. I can sense the emotions running through this so strongly. I feel like I’m there, there’s a celtic sadness and nostalgia I recognise too I think :)
    By the way, I’ve linked up this week, it might not seem immediately like a gift inspired piece but it is to me in a roundabout way that I can’t explain here! I hope that’s OK.

  3. I love the way you’re slowly building this story up – a novel in bite-sized chunks! Keeping me guessing as ever as to what her mysterious past is. You’re very good at creating atmosphere. xx

  4. Sara, really enjoyed reading this piece. Great descriptive writing! I need to read the other 2 short stories that you reference now too! Fab.

  5. Lovely! I like the mixture of emotion that you’ve brought about here. Your words are succicnt, but oh so very powerful :) Thank you for sharing and hosting another fantastic round this week!

  6. I love the way you’ve captured so much emotion here and there’s the promise of an interesting story underlying. Clever stuff.

  7. This is written with so much passion and again with every word used to its fullness. Beautifully written and it took me back to reading ‘Thunder’ and ‘Dream’ – the start of your novel, perhaps?!
    #ThePrompt

  8. I love the way the story is developing through these powerful little pieces of flash fiction. This one made me so sad! Sparsely written, but with an awful lot going on between the lines… Xx

  9. So sad that what used to be so treasured has not continued to give delight. Letting go can so hard and depressing. Hope she truly can move on.

    Brilliant writing! Very engaging and inviting … it definitely sucked me in. #ThePrompt

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