The Prompt: Up

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The Prompt 118: Up

The weight of expectation
crushes as it wraps
around and feeds
the fear of failure
that grows with each
The prospect of relief
is lost as reality
bites, whether true
or imagined.
The burden of judgment,
denied by tongues yet
seen in eyes,
defeats and pushes
Where despair threatens
to drown with a sea
of inadequacy
and anxiety colours
all attempts
to rise.
I wait.
Until there is nowhere
left to go,
but up.

© Sara Murray, 9 June 2016

Sharing with What I’m Writing and Prose for Thought.




25 thoughts on “The Prompt: Up”

  1. All the way through this I was thinking ‘oh no!’ – not because it wasn’t well written (it was – as always!) but because I really felt for you. The ending gave me a lift though – you are right, the only way is up. I hope you’re going in that direction now. xxx Thanks for linking to #WhatImWriting

    1. Sara | mumturnedmom

      Thank you Maddy, feeling more positive than I was a few weeks ago. I’d had a bad day, but writing this made me feel much better x

  2. This spoke to me really deeply. It summed up how I felt when in the depths of my anxiety and how I finally surfaced to face life again. Thank you for writing this.

    1. Sara | mumturnedmom

      Thank you for such a lovely comment, I’m glad (sort of!) that it resonated, nice to know I’m not alone x

  3. Very beautifully written, I also noticed the symmetry in the way you set out the lines of this poem. Since I began blogging in February It’s been so cool to read and interact with peotry again! The only way is up- you’re right! #whatimwriting

    1. Sara | mumturnedmom

      Thank you very much. When I started blogging I never thought I’d find myself reading and writing poetry. I love it :)

  4. I’ve just read this poem four times and felt a different emotion each time… Anyone who has ever suffered with anxiety at any point in time can relate to this… Mostly today I am thinking of my son and his anxiety but I’ve been here too, and sure I’ll return again. Love the hope in the last line. x

  5. I really enjoyed this, visually it really appealed to me as well as lyrically. I read this in mind of current issues in the UK and it really spoke to me. Loved the flow, and I loved that it could be interpreted in a variety of ways. Powerful. #Prose4T

    1. Sara | mumturnedmom

      Thank you, it’s very interesting that it fits so well with the issues in the UK, not something that I anticipated when I wrote it!

  6. When I first read this to me it pretty much summed up the state of the country right now. The only way for us is up now then when I reread it it became a bit more personal. #prose4t

  7. As I read this, you can feel the downward spiral and I was wondering how it was going to relate to the prompt word – but I could completely see that at the end. Very clever and beautifully written. Thank you for linking to Prose for Thought :) x

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