As she entered the room a sudden burst of laughter rushed towards her, breaking around her like a wave and threatening to overwhelm her.
She had only been gone a moment, but the feeling in the room seemed to have shifted; the previously amiable chatter taking on a more hostile tone.
The laughter forced and insincere; where once it had felt welcoming and spontaneous.
As she moved through the crowd, her eyes flitting from face to face, she could feel the change. Eyes unfocused, smiles fixed, faces slack.
The animated room had disappeared and been replaced with a mere illustration, a facade. As if the occupants were caricatures of themselves. The laughter a ghastly soundtrack to a bad cartoon.
What had she missed? What had passed in this room; through this room?
She searched the faces, looking for any sign of understanding or knowledge. Of self-awareness.
She could find none.
The further into the room she traveled the more sinister the mood became and she could feel the malevolence in the air begin to choke her.
She reached the far side of the room and turned.
The laughter stopped.
You can find this weeks #ThePrompt linky here. I do hope this week’s prompt inspired you; I look forward to reading your posts.
Oooo what happens next ???
I wish I knew :)
Wow that has stirred up some very repressed emotions. The feeling that you know people are talking about you is just awful. You have captured it perfectly. Well done xx
Thank you, it’s absolutely not what I expected to write! Took me by surprise a little…
Intriguing! I definitely want to find out what’s going on in that room!! :-) Xx
So do I :)
Blimey! How the atmosphere changed so drastically and you described it amazingly. Well done, Sara! X
Thank you Tracy x
Whoa. Your words perfectly captured the sense of insecurity when being talked about. Id like to know who this person is to be worthy of that kind of curiosity from others. Very intriguing Sara, and well done!
Thank you Maria, it was a slightly unexpected piece…!
Wow, you really captured the sentiment here. I was cringing for this poor person. Sounds like you could develop this in to something bigger. The possibilities are wide open.
Thank you, I am thinking about where this piece can go next… :)
Ooh this is very atmospheric – love the way you’ve used laughter as a sinister thing and captured that feeling of being talked about and laughed at in a negative way so perfectly.
Thank you Louise, wasn’t quite what I expected to write!
oh lord, that put me on edge! Very well written.
Thank you, I felt a little like that when I finished writing it!
I feel I have a ghostly spirit behind me now, brilliant writing, why have I not followed your prompt posts before I wonder.
Thank you Fiona, and I don’t know ;)
A very intriguing image described so brilliantly Sara. I really would love to read that book when you get it written ;) x x
Ah, thank you Suzanne, maybe one day :)
I really want to read on! What happens next? What amazingly descriptive language. You should write more of this!
Thank you, I might well do that, I quite like writing snapshots based around the same character :)
I love this Sara, it totally resonated with me. I really enjoy your forays into fiction, I hope you do more x
Thank you Iona :)
On the edge of my seat Sara. Great writing. I do think personally that quite often the best way is to just go with it when writing, and seeing what comes out of it… #FridayFiction
Thank you, that is generally the way it goes with me :)
Eeek! Very eerie. Is it linked to the story you’ve been writing (that you’ve shared bit of here before)? It has that sinister edge. #FridayFiction
I wasn’t thinking that as I wrote it, as it was more about the feeling than the character, but it would fit well with the other pieces I’ve written about the Chosen girl…
WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!!!!
Great Post
LOL, I’ll work that out the next time I write about her :)
This has to be one of my biggest fears – especially after what I had to put up with from my ex. You have captured it perfectly. So well written Sara and thank you for linking to Prose for Thought x
Thank you Vicky x